The Official Writing Challenge
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07/23/11
Very good. I enjoyed reading this.

"I started stealing at the ripe old age of none." Nice.

At first I thought this was a girl so you might want to establish that earlier on. :)

"I decided right then and there to pull a Hail Mary prayer..."

I love that paragraph. Great voice!

I like the Chaplain and his analogies.
07/23/11
Well done. You told a hard-hitting story without wrapping it up all neat and tidy. Lots of raw emotions and very realistic. Terrific.
07/24/11
I feel like I know this young man. What a life to be born into. Excellent story-telling, as always:)
07/25/11
Quality story-telling with excellent sentence styling.

Quite effective.
07/25/11
I love how you introduce and maintain a crossflow of similarities and contrasts and keep us with you all the way.
Thank God for prison chaplains - for of all preachers they have a captive audience.
Very well-written.
07/25/11
Wow, this is good! How you managed to get such a complete story across within the word limit amazes me. I especially liked the pastor's making a connection for the man on death row with the thieves on the cross. This is a keepsake!
07/27/11
This is really good! Very, Very well done!
07/28/11
Congratulations on your well-deserved first place. I enjoyed this interesting story told with a great voice and style.
07/28/11
Story-telling at its best. A great piece and a well-deserved win...congratulations!!
07/28/11
Wow - this really touches the heart with its excellent storyline. Beautifully written. Congrats on your very well deserved 1st place.
07/28/11
I certainly agree with the judges. This is first rate. A story that will stick in my mind for a long time. Congratulations!
07/28/11
Congratulations on "sitting on top" with this outstanding story! The last paragraph is "priceless."
07/28/11
All of the above, Mari. You are definitely an awesome writer. And I can say I know you ... or when you are famous ... I knew her when.
07/28/11
Excellent voice. Love it.

Congratulations on this bit of awesomeoness, Mari!
07/28/11
Mari, I love this for so many reasons. First of all, it's believable, a real story. The POV is strong and lets the reader get into the mind of the character. Then it 'says something' worth saying, it has a point. Just splendid and worthy.
07/28/11
WOW! Mari, God has really given you a mighty gift with words! I look forward to seeing how He choses to prosper this gift! Love you! CONGRATULATIONS!
07/28/11
Congratulations on your first place win.

The story was told with conviction and promise. Excellent perspective about a young man in prison.
07/29/11
Wow! This definitely deserved 1st place! Great Gospel message wrapped in an interesting setting and story.
07/29/11
Mari, I LOVE this!! Excellent in so many ways. It gave me goosebumps. You definitely deserved your editor's choice award. Super congrats on 1st place!!
09/20/11
Wow!i love this.i really love your style of writing.it makes easy for the reader to comprehend.Congratulations again!
07/01/12
Congrats on your BoB placing!
07/01/12
Mari - this is absolutely, positively STUNNING. Just WOWzers. Congrats and 2nd place BoB, my friend (and I need/get to interview you - watch for that :D). LOVE ya.
07/01/12
Hi Marita,

Great entry and very deserving. Bea and I love sharing the gospel and this really touched our heart.

Congratulations and God Bless, Mike & Bea Edwards

07/01/12
Re-reading this reminded me how much I love this piece. Congratulations on your win!
07/01/12
I can see why this was a runner up for the Best of the Best. Awesome job!
07/01/12
Mari, this is so AWESOME. The thief's prayer made me almost cry. Love it - congrats times a kazillion on your BoB 2nd place!
07/01/12
Marita, this is superb and well deserving of runner up in BoB! Congratulations!
07/01/12
Whoa! This is very good. Especially love the voice.
07/01/12
Wow. This is amazing. A mighty big "CONGRATS" on 2nd place Best of the Best!
07/01/12
Mari, you have so many wonderful elements and references in this. Super, heart-felt congratulations on 2nd place Best of the Best for 2012!!! <3 <3 <3
07/09/12
Congrats! I am so happy for you. God Bless~
07/11/12
Marita, I too congratulate you for a story so very well-told!
09/29/12
Praise God, young man. Welcome to the family of God. You are loved.

--a sister in Christ
06/23/14
Nice story. Very real.