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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Music (03/08/07)

TITLE: Allelu
By Jan Ackerson
03/10/07


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Almost from the day he was born, my little Jesus’ face has at times taken on a look of intense, calm concentration. Even as an infant, he would often still the flailing of his tiny arms and legs and gaze about, quietly, from his cradle. I always wondered at such times—what are you thinking, precious one?

And now he is two years old, and he delights me every day with a new word, a fresh utterance in his childish lisp. I never tire of watching him; he sits and plays with the little Noah’s ark that Joseph has carved for him, babbling his version of animal noises and occasionally chastising a wayward bear or lion.

This morning, I was preparing bread for the day and listening to Jesus as he prattled with his wooden animals. When he suddenly fell silent, I looked to the corner where he played, and saw that he had that same look again—quiet, serene, with a hint of a smile. He padded over to me on chubby feet and tugged on my garment, looking earnestly into my eyes.

“Music, mama,” he said. “Music.”

I stopped kneading the dough and listened, thinking perhaps that a traveling musician was at our gate, playing his lyre in hopes of receiving a bite of fish or a silver coin. I heard nothing but the ever-present locusts, whose raucous complaints could hardly be called music.

“Mama!” Jesus held up his arms, and who could resist such an invitation? I lifted him to my hip and kissed his dark curls. One kiss was enough—he squirmed to get down and toddled to the window with a grin. “Music, mama!”

There are many things that I do not understand about my little boy, and with every passing day, I feel him slipping out of my arms and into his Father’s world.

What music do you hear, my son, that is hidden from my ears?

Creator, You dwell with us now,
And so we proclaim with one voice—
Each creature and each blade of grass,
Each rock and each river—Rejoice!

Allelu, bless Your name, allelu,
Creation is singing for You.

O hear now the animals’ choir:
Vicuna, raccoon, chimpanzee—
We offer our song to the King:
Great elephant, tiniest flea.

Allelu, bless Your name, allelu,
Creation is singing for You.

We sing, too. (You only can hear).
The cedars and lilies, the wheat,
Bamboo, passionflower, and palm:
Hosannas we lay at Your feet.

Allelu, bless Your name, allelu,
Creation is singing for You.

A wee grain of sand, and this stone,
This boulder, this mountain, this star—
Our melody will not be stilled,
We glory in all that You are.

Allelu, bless Your name, allelu,
Creation is singing for You.

Come, waters of earth, raise your song:
Murmuring book, rushing waterfalls, too,
Lake, river and pond, mighty sea,
All join in the great “Allelu!”

Allelu, bless Your name, allelu,
Creation is singing for You.



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Helen Paynter03/15/07
Yes, Allelu indeed. Very lovely, and so very true. 'Why do birds sing?' my youngest asked the other day. Here is the answer. And they groan of course, too. Now see what you've started - I'm getting theological!
Teri Wilson03/15/07
This is gorgeous! Absolutely beautiful writing. Congrats, Teri
Jen Davis03/15/07
A precious story. And you wrote a song, too? It doesn’t get any stronger on topic than that! Both were incredibly beautiful. Very, very nice work.
Mo 03/15/07
Wow.
Verna Cole Mitchell 03/15/07
Super writing here! It demonstrates perfectly the "masters" category! Beautifully done!
Sharlyn Guthrie03/15/07
Lovely portrayal of Mary and her little boy, so human, and yet...
You captured it well.
Leigh MacKelvey03/15/07
Lyrical, poetic, moving ... so much to this entry! I love imagining Mary's heart and thoughts as a mother. I was reminded of the passion I feel for my 2 yr. old grandson when he stands in front of the T.V and watches a Christian video of children singing hymns and holding his arms out to me ... asking me to sing "Deep and Wide" with him. I teared when I as I felt Mary's feelings for her Son through your writing.
Lynda Schultz 03/15/07
Delighful! And I sure the Lord heard the full orchestra of creation when our oh-so-human souls can only hear one small part. Well done.
Marilee Alvey03/17/07
Wow! I felt like I was able to look into the life of Jesus as a toddler. How precious He must have been. I have no doubt that He heard angels from time to time, whispering their glorious song, filling His heart with who He was. Wouldn't you love to hear just one song like that? Wouldn't you love to reach into time and love on that tiny child? This poem gave me just a hint of access, enough to reach into time and imagine, if only for a moment. Thanks for the thrill.
Jacquelyn Horne03/19/07
This is a different take of the early life of Jesus. The poem was good. I assume it was written by the author of this piece since it was not otherwise identified. Good job.
Catrina Bradley 03/19/07
A wonderful peek into what Jesus very well may have been like. Loved it, loved the lyrics!
Teri Wilson03/19/07
Jan, I should have known this one was yours. It is stunning.
Pat Guy 03/19/07
Oh Jan - you've done it again! I love the quality of this - the sweet depth and the Hallowed innocence. It's beautiful.
Loren T. Lowery03/19/07
A masterful blend of being on topic, message and talent.
Linda Watson Owen03/19/07
I say ditto to every wonderful comment so far. Jan, your creativity always astounds me. I would never have thought of this. You have so skillfully placed your reader 'right there' and made Jesus and Mary so incredibly 'real'. Your gifted pen has blessed us once more, dear friend!
Sandra Petersen 03/19/07
I love the wisdom as well as the childish play you described throughout this piece. Who knows what Jesus what thinking in his contemplative times: perhaps you and me, all of us?

I liked this as told from the POV of Mary, who pondered all she observed and heard in her heart. Very well done.
Laurie Glass03/19/07
The first word that comes to mind is captivating. I don't know if I even blinked when I read this. What an awesome piece.
T. F. Chezum03/19/07
I read this earlier this week and wondered if this was yours. Great job, as usual. I always enjoy your work.
Betty Castleberry03/19/07
This is lovely and so very unique. I love the portrayal of Jesus as a child. Very well done.
Myrna Noyes03/20/07
Oh, my! Wow! Incredible! Your story is sweet and wonderfully written, but the poem/song is absolutely magnificent! As I read, I could almost hear a melody in the background! What profound praise! :) Did I mention that I really, really liked your piece????
Joanne Sher 03/20/07
Absolutely delightful and beautiful and worshipful. This charmed me and made me smile. Loved the story AND the song (I was looking for the annnotation of where you got the song from - I was doubly blessed to discover it was yours!).
Sara Harricharan 03/20/07
Never quite saw the story of Mary the way you portrayed it here. Very thought-provoking and somehow mysterious like. I loved the touch of the wooden Noah's ark and the bit with "one kiss was enough" The song was lovely-reminding me of angels. ^_^
Sheri Gordon03/20/07
Really, really good. I love when people bring baby to Jesus to life How absolutely adorable to see Him as a toddler -- I never really stop to think about that. And the music lyrics are great, too. Do you write music, or know some one who does? This would be beautiful.
Tiffany Secula03/21/07
Sing Allelu always!

Super Excellent Wonderful Teriffic

I have often wondered about Mary and Jesus when he was a very young child, this piece was so interesting to think about and so beautiful!!
LaNaye Perkins03/21/07
I had never really thought of Jesus as a toddler. What a wonderful insight you gave me. I was wonderful, just wonderful!
Donna Emery03/21/07
Wow! This was amazing! I loved the story and the hymn was absolutely wonderful. Thank you so much for sharing this
Julie Arduini03/21/07
A story and a song? You have blessed me twice. This was fantastic. I always love to ponder the thoughts of Mary and young Jesus. You captured them so well.
Sara Harricharan 03/22/07
Congrats on the EC ^_^ I really liked this one.
Loren T. Lowery03/22/07
This was so beautiful and the EC Award so deserved. Congratulations
Venice Kichura03/26/07
This is beautiful, Jan!
A well-deserved congratulations!
03/26/07
I love your great imagination, Jan. It is funny, but very few people reflect on Jesus' early years. The only mention of those years is when he was 12; however, He WAS born into this world as all babies are; He DID go through all the growing-up things that all babies do. So I realy love this little story of Jesus when He was a toddler. I aim to read more of your stories.
cindy yarger03/28/07
Jan - better late than never! Got the computer back - it may not have any more viruses but it still has several oddities! Congratualations on this piece. You did a great job and really caught the essence of Mary's motherhood and Jesus as both son of man and Son of God. Very tender and touchable.