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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Charade (08/14/08)

TITLE: Conviction Leads to Truth
By Marlene Austin
08/19/08


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The palace splendor was muted in the governing areas with only the marble top of the large circular table revealing the owner’s richness. The living quarters were splendid in décor without being opulent. The fragrance of jasmine floated on continually moving breaths of air throughout the common walkthroughs.

It was the Throne Room and the Great Hall in which everything was held in place with golden threads. Rims of tables, edges of lighting fixtures, and solid backs of reclining chairs were graced with pure 24k gold. Glimpses of glimmering gold were spied from every visage. Here the scent of roses was so heavy it was tasted with every word.

During a morning report, one governor pleaded the misery of the people to Pharaoh. “Sire, the pestilence of insects which has cursed our lands for the past moon’s cycle has not only made our people ill, but is, also, beginning to hinder the welfare of the livestock.”

“Thank you, Pane`ath. I have asked the Physicians to make this matter their chief concern. I desire some degree of relief from this curse within the moon’s first quarter. I expect an effective solution from you, Men of Science, by the moon’s phase. Now, I have more immediate claims on my attention. Leave me and complete my bidding.”

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As Pharaoh was dressed by his servants in preparation for the evening events in which he would entertain a multitude of guests, his thoughts turned to one special guest. “Has the Lady Sarai everything she needs for sitting at my left hand at the feast table this evening?”

“Yes, sire. I believe it is your third wife, Queen Astira, who has taken her under wing. This lady is very beautiful, sire.”

“Yes, she is of the most delicate beauty I have seen – skin so fair, it is the drinking of milk with the eyes. The red of her lips is the shame of rubies, and her eyes – ah, the golden flakes of sunset can be caught in the brilliance of those eyes.”

“You are quite taken with her, my lord.”

“Taken with her? She will be my wife after two more weeks of this purification interim.”

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Discussions were mostly private at the feasting table since distance put a limit to the space a respectful voice could reach. Pharaoh and Sarai exchanged pleasantries among adoring glances as he made sure her every need was being met.

Before long, however, many seemed to be discussing the afflictions attacking the land. “My lord, this affliction of your people is something I would like to make comment with you.”

“No, no, my love. Do not be distressed by these murmurings broached by the unlearned. My greatest Physicians are coming up with a solution to this problem at this very moment. I would not see your glorious face distressed with woes of this kind.” He stroked her silken hair.

“My lord, I cannot bear to hear of the difficulties others are facing all because of my presence with you.”

Pharaoh straightened, “What light can you shed on this ailment?”

“Surely you have noticed that the arrival of these afflictions began shortly after you brought me to your palace. I have appreciated your kindness and generosity to my… to Abram, and I, my lord, have been shown much tenderness by all your house. Additionally, in the weeks in which I have come to know your personage, you have gained my affection, but I will never be able to marry you, sire. It is because of my affection for you that I cannot continue the deception to which you have fallen prey. Your people will suffer until you know the truth – that my brother, in truth, my half-brother, is also my husband. It is against the laws of our One Sovereign God for me to marry another.”

Quietly, Pharaoh rose. Leaning to her ear, he whispered, “Thank you. You have my admiration, Lady.”

Pharaoh immediately had the courtiers bring his officers and Abram to the Throne Room.

“You are no longer welcomed in my land.”

“But, my lord, wha…”

“Silence! Do not speak in my presence or your tongue will be removed!” Two officers were immediately around Abram, hands on weapons.

“I have learned all I need about your people. It is obvious that your god has granted all courage and conviction only to your women. It is only because of the affection I have for your wife that you are being spared. Depart quickly. Never return.”


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08/21/08
Very good! I had to look up in Genesis and re read the story to refresh my memory of the sequence of events. You hit the nail on the head with this story, and had me intrigued with the developement. I didn't clue in at first, but right on! Thankfully the story turned out like it did...It is humbling to realize that even the great Abram was caught in the charade, with deceit. Thanks to his WIFE, God delivered him from this charade...Helen
Yvette Roelofse08/21/08
I loved this. Very well written, and a great interpretation of the topic.
Jennifer Wetter08/22/08
A great reminder of how even God sees beyond our masks and how others often do as well.
Jan Ackerson 08/22/08
Well done Biblical fiction; I enjoyed getting to know these poeple better.

Take a look at the first words of sentences in your first paragraph. Could you vary them a little, for a more compelling "hook" for your readers?

This was an excellent choice of Bible stories for this week's topic.
Cheri Hardaway 08/25/08
Very well executed! And what a great depiction of the impression that Abram's deception gave Pharaoh of God's people! Nice work. Blessings, Cheri
Catrina Bradley 08/25/08
The dialect is a treat - and the embellishments to this account are wonderful. I love your descriptions. A great read!
Joanney Uthe08/26/08
Excellent choice for the topic. You put us right in the throne room with your illustrations. I liked how Sarai used grace in her addressing Pharoah. Great job.
Joy Faire Stewart08/27/08
Great job with descriptions and dialogue. Unique writing on the topic and very enjoyable.
Joshua Janoski08/28/08
This piece should be in the advance category, not intermediate. :)

VERY well written. I felt the story come to life in a way that I had never felt before when simply reading it in the Bible. Lots of great details and descriptions inserted into this. Thank you for sharing this, Marlene.


   
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