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By Charla Diehl
01/08/14
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In hushed darkness I awoke
hearing words that someone spoke,
Twinkling stars gave me a nod--
What. . .me. . .the voice was God’s?

I rubbed my eyes and shook my head
and learned about His sacred bread,
A moonbeam skipped across the floor
sweeping smoldering ashes from years before

I watched you, child, try to sleep
and know each thought you dare not speak
You were here? I don’t recall. . .
I saw your every teardrop fall

His presence--calming, so kind, His eyes
He claimed me His to my surprise
So soft the voice which brought me peace
He offered me such sweet release

My cares, no more my burdens be,
in love He took them all from me
The clock chimed twelve, I was tired
sleep finally came--so long desired

The visit concluded by day’s end
I’ll forever call this Jesus, Friend
My encounter--skeptics don’t believe
but my faith’s alive through love received

Now on the dawn of each day’s gift
to Him my heart and mind shall lift
I know beyond all worldly ways
there’s only one worthy of my praise

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01/10/14

I’d love to have your input into the free writing lessons available on the FaithWriters forums. This week’s lesson is on writing devotionals, and next week will cover writing on topic for the weekly challenge. Look for it at http://www.faithwriters.com/Boards/phpBB2/viewforum.php?f=67, or if you’re on Facebook, you can “like” Faithwriters Writing Lessons.

01/11/14

Beautiful and magnificent ending that says it all.

God bless~

01/11/14

Such a deeply meaningful poem, but with a lighthearted beat that reminded me of the act of skipping. Loved it.

And now I'm wondering...is this nonfiction?

01/12/14

Me too. Is this lovely little poem a real experience of yours? It's deep and meaningful and jogs along beautifully. Good job!

01/15/14

What a vivid visual of an anesome encounter in this poem! And I too was left wondering if it is based on a true experience. But fiction or non-fiction it is moving and the last stanza is a powerfully wonderful poem of praise on its own! Enjoyed!

01/15/14

Well said!

01/16/14

Congratulations!

God bless~

01/16/14

You've created a poignant inspiring message. I loved, "the voice was God's." Many congrats, Charla.

01/17/14

Congratulations on your 5th place EC win, Charla. Your poem is powerful and moving. Well done!

Judith Gayle Smith-Owens Vitouswykegardinerclark

01/17/14

"I saw your every teardrop fall."
Thank you for your heart . . .
Congratulations!
Hugs in, through and because of Him. Hebrews 10:26-31 KJV
Judi

Margaret Kearley

01/17/14

So many wonderful lines here in this poetic testimony. Just so lovely to read - and echo with own thanks and praise. Many congrats on well deserved placing.

Verna Cole Mitchell

01/17/14

Congratulations on your EC for a wonderful testimony in beautiful words.

01/19/14

Stunning in its simplicity all wrapped in God's complexity. Beautifully crafted and I loved its cadence!