The Official Writing Challenge
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01/16/09
You've made some excellent observations. I like the simple cafe setting and how you expand it to a view of America. I also like how you began and ended with "you do the math."
01/16/09
Ahhh, the sweet taste of freedom. Interesting tie in with the breakfast crowd at the cafe.
01/20/09
Love the atmosphere in the first half of this piece--I wanted to go there!
01/20/09
Nicely done on many levels.
01/21/09
Excellent description and atmosphere. And a haunting message. Wonderful.