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By Eliza Evans
01/09/09
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From the Offices of:
Ms. Cheryl Thompson
CEO, Thompson Enterprises
New York, New York
USA 10946

Dear Small Town, Florida,

I am writing this letter to you, because, I feel sure no one else will understand.

I miss you.

I've been gone 5 years now, and I miss you more than I have ever missed any thing or any person.

I feel like the woman who turned her back and betrayed her most faithful love and companion!

I long for the crystal colors of your ocean, the spicy fragrance of your orange groves, the faithful warmth of your sun, wrapped around me like a robe.

I miss the feeling of belonging.

Remember that morning I sat on the bench in the Bird Sanctuary?
The filmy mist lifting off the lush, leafy swamps, giving glimpse to a world so secret and set apart?

For hours I watched that pair of Great White Egrets turn their elegant necks to fluff and preen their long, velvety feathers. One by one by one.
A perfect union of movement and grace.

One egret kept holding out it's snowy white wings towards me - towards the sun - revealing a sparkly, almost jewelled undertone.

A holy hush fell over my spirit and I remember thinking how fitting that the day was Sunday.

Today is Sunday.

Florida, honey? I love you and I'm coming home!

Very Truly Yours,
Cheryl

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01/16/09

Clever idea-writing a letter to a place. My daughter lives in Florida, and you've described it perfectly.

Be careful of "it's"--with an apostrophe, it means "it is", not the possessive.

I'd love to be in Florida now--it's 0 degrees where I am!

01/20/09

What a creative way to deal with the topic! :) I loved your letter, especially the part about the Egrets and this delightfully descriptive bit: "I long for the crystal colors of your ocean, the spicy fragrance of your orange groves, the faithful warmth of your sun, wrapped around me like a robe." It made me want to go there with you for a visit! Good job!

Norma-Anne Hough

01/20/09

I really enjoyed this unique entry. Makes me want to visit Florida. Well done on something different.
Love,
Norms

Teresa Lee Rainey

01/20/09

Yes, Florida is the place to be. Truely enjoyed your out-of-the-box entry. :)

Benjamin Graber

01/20/09

Oh I really like this one - so creative!
I have a love for Florida, too; I don't live there, but we have taken family vacations there for years, and I have so many memories there! I love the ocean breeze and moonlit walks on the beach...

01/22/09

Very creative way to deal with the topic! Nice work!

Verna Cole Mitchell

01/22/09

What a unique take on the topic! I loved the imagery.

01/22/09

Very cute and fun. I found some grammatical things that could use polish, but otherwise I enjoyed this. I also might have expanded it a bit--given us a bit more background on your MC. This felt like it was fun to write!

Trina Courtenay

01/23/09

Hey Nancy, look at how many times your piece was read and so many comments to boot! Way to write your first entry into the Challange...so discriptive, you were able to bring me with you to Florida.

Write on!

01/23/09

I would be careful of your commas as there are times when it may make the sentence unclear or they are unnecessary.

This is a very original entry. I would love to hear even more description of the area and how you feel about it.

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