The Official Writing Challenge
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01/15/09
Very patriotic and sincere poem.

Maybe a few tweaks of the meter, for a smoother flow?

I like the imagery in the first part especially.
01/19/09
Nicely done. I like the way you celebrate the heritage of the USA while warning of its possible fall. Your national pride does not blind you to the nation's weaknesses. Good job.
01/21/09
I like the way your poem starts with a lovely tribute to our flag and what it stand for. You have some wonderful/patriotic images for your reader. Oh that the USA would heed your warning.