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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Hard and Soft (04/23/09)

TITLE: Crimson Raindrop
By Rachel Burkum
04/29/09


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A raindrop descended from the sky, aiming for the parched earth below. Its route was fast halted though, as it hit an immoveable object with force. Spraying into tiny fragments, the drop managed to retain some shape as gravity pulled it to a roughly hewn edge.

The surface was made of dense fibers that the raindrop soaked into, leaving a streak of cool wetness behind. Journeying down, the droplet ran along the rigid lines, searching for the earth to drink it in.

But instead of soil, the drop of water was gradually brought to a standstill. It then spread upon a gentler plane - one that was warm. Life was beating through this hand. Though that life was quickly fading, poured out before the eyes that watched.

Mingling with the crimson flow, the raindrop turned from crystal to ruby as it was once again propelled forward. It rolled down the creased palm, drawing on a strange mixture of anguish and love.

Suddenly the droplet eased over a harsh, cold barrier - a nail, driven through the very flesh that held so much pain. It was a cruel contrast to the forgiveness granted...a tool to bring a bitter end.

The raindrop moved on, once again soothing the skin of the suffering One. It gave fresh life to the pores caked with grime and blood, absorbing the colors that would forever stain its luminous form.

And then...it fell. Another ride down, down to the earth, passing the shape of a Man undeserving of the torture given him. Finally the droplet completed the flight as it splashed onto the dehydrated clay.

No one noticed the faint sparkle before it soaked into the earth, never to be seen again. All attention was on the cross that bore love personified - their Savior come at last, to die at the hands of men.

The scene was never the same after that. Though the shadow of the cross was soon replaced, and though the witnesses moved on, the history remained. If one looked closely, they might find the bloodstains still, proof of the distinction between an everlasting love and an everlasting hate.

Three days later, the sorrow of a hostile end would vanish. But for a tiny droplet of water, the world had looked very different for a brief moment. It would never be the same again. For a brief moment with the Son of God would leave anyone changed forever.

A single raindrop had embarked on a journey not many could take. And it had ended in a way least expected. But to be covered in Christís blood was not a blemish on oneself. It was the most precious gift of all.


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Seema Bagai 04/30/09
Wonderful writing.
Emily Gibson05/04/09
This is a story of a journey taken and finished, a powerful allegory and unique view of the topic. Vividly written.
Mona Purvis05/04/09
I loved the journey this took me on. Precious.
Mona
Shelley Ledfors 05/04/09
Powerful and beautiful. Amazing writing. Thanks for sharing.
Karlene Jacobsen 05/04/09
Absolutely riveting.
Connie Dixon05/04/09
"It was the most precious gift of all". This was quite a creative view of this most divine moment. Very precious and well done.
Patricia Turner05/04/09
Oh how I love this entry and how you drew me into the raindrop's journey that turned into mine as well. Beautiful and vivid descriptions and masterful writing.
Verna Cole Mitchell 05/06/09
You presented a stunning unforgettable picture. Thank you.
Betty Castleberry05/06/09
Powerful imagery. Well done.
Chely Roach05/06/09
Simply beautiful...
Beckie Stewart05/06/09
Loved this approach to the subject as well as the topic of our Savior.
Bryan Ridenour05/06/09
Wow...excellent work.
Loren T. Lowery05/06/09
You took the reader on an unforgettable journey with your descriptive writing. Giving "life" to inanimate objects is not an easy thing to do, but you've done it here, masterfully!
Myrna Noyes05/06/09
What a creative and compelling piece! It had a poetic quality to its flow, and I was very blessed!

I especially liked this line:
"If one looked closely, they might find the bloodstains still, proof of the distinction between an everlasting love and an everlasting hate."

Excellent writing! :)
Loren T. Lowery05/07/09
Had a feeling this just might place. Congratulations! Well done, indeed.
Myrna Noyes05/07/09
CONGRATULATIONS ON YOUR EC FOR THIS LOVELY PIECE!! :)
Charla Diehl 05/07/09
Amazing the story a little raindrop could tell--creative, imaginative and thought provoking read. Congrats on your EC placement.
Fredrick Nicholson05/13/09
Simply beaautiful! A masterpiece. Our Savior would be pleased. Be blessed!