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01/15/09
Interesting premise--colonial sci-fi! I had to read it a second time to be clear on what whas happening and who was speaking, and some of the King James language was just a tad off--BUT--this is wildly creative, and fascinating, and a superb cautionary tale. Excellent!
01/15/09
Amazingly creative and well done! Wonderful job. I loved it.
This is a great work. I'd like to "see" who is talking though. Some description maybe? Otherwise an A+.
01/21/09
An excellent way to make your readers think and peak their interest. Good idea.
01/23/09
Good story once I got past all the old English words. This put me in mind of "A Christmas Carol" towards the end when the MC was able to see the past and present--but not the future. Congrats on your win.