The Official Writing Challenge
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01/15/09
We are blessed, aren't we?

This is a good poem--maybe just a little tweaking of the meter would help it to flow more smoothly.

I liked how you handled the transition from "then" to "now".
01/15/09
I AGREE, THIS IS GOOD, BUT COULD USE TWEAKING. NONETHELESS, I LOVED IT. VERNA MULL
01/16/09
Good poem and right on topic. I too, feel the rhythm was a bit off in a few places. Other than that, I liked this and the way you compared the 'then' and 'now'.
This was quite a poem. I like the comparisons, and the reminder of how blessed we are as a nation. It is sad we've taken it for granted.
01/21/09
Thank you for sharing your poem. I admire those who have the gift to write poetry. I look forward to reading more of your work.