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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Christmas Carols/Carolling (10/02/08)
The snowman smiled thru teeth of coal
His carrot nose so long
Blocking from view a happy group
As they sang Christmas songs

Their joyous sounds filled the air
And made the heavens ring
The sounds were almost like
The Angels when they sang

He watched them travel door to door
As they walked across the snow
Pondering why they would sing
For folks they didn’t know

He knew his time was getting short
And strained against the wind
Listening for the slightest sound
To hear those songs again

And hoping it would freeze tonight
Is the prayer that he would pray
And the sun hide it’s face tomorrow
So he might last another day

For he knew again towards evening
The joy that it would bring
As they sang, of the birth of Jesus
Our Master, Lord and King

Then, he would be content to melt
And perhaps again next year
The kids would build him again
Once more those songs to hear
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Jan Ackerson
10/09/08
Clever and creative POV!

Be careful of "it's" with an apostrophe, which means "it is" or "it has". For a possessive, you want simply "its".

This is a sweet poem that chlidren will love.
Holly Westefeld
10/09/08
I love your creativity.
Polishing the meter on this might make it a good candidate for a picture book.
Karlene Jacobsen 
10/14/08
Well, the Bible does say that all creation sings His praise, doesn't it? Why not snowmen? I love the snowman's prayer. We should all be asking to hear it just a little longer.
Catrina Bradley
10/14/08
Very clever! I enjoyed hearing this snowman's story. I stumbled a few times on the meter, but the poem is so cute I didn't mind. :)
Beth LaBuff 
10/16/08
Your title is perfect for this creative poem. I like how you set this up with descriptions of the snowman "teeth of coal" and "carrot nose so long -- Blocking from view…" From our viewpoint, we already know the snowman's plight, but just imagining the snowman wanting to "not melt" so he could hear songs about the birth of Jesus, was a new aspect of snowman thoughts that I really enjoyed. Nice work on this!
Leah Nichols 
10/16/08
Cute entry! I liked it very much. Yes it needs a little tweaking with grammar and meter, but it's well done anyway! Thanks for sharing!