The Official Writing Challenge
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11/16/06
Really suspenseful, well-written.

Picky me--I found myself fretting about the legality. I think any pool would be very concerned about lawsuits, and would not allow swimming when certified lifeguards were not on duty. I could be wrong, though...

I love your main character's constant conversation with God--something we should all practice. Nice job.
11/17/06
Riveting story! Excellent!
11/18/06
This was better the second time through! Great characterization and dialogue - and the perfect ending! Bravo.
11/18/06
Well done! (I thought it would end with her being inspired to become a certified lifeguard.)
11/19/06
Very nice! I was definitely captivated by this story and enjoyed reading it very much. A very good job.
11/21/06
Oh, I loved this. A bit predictable, perhaps, but I still loved it. I want to know who tossed her the life preserver ring.
I really enjoyed reading this and especially liked the true to life sounding dialog. Great job, very well written and enjoyable. :)
Congatulations on your Placing! Well deserved.