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By Melanie Kerr
11/21/12
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Each day from secret places
Into the cosmos hurled
Babies loud and lusty
Are born into this world

Imagine then for each a jar
That’s filled with numbered days
Each life has time bestowed on them
To spend in countless ways

Some jars are full and brimming
With decades rich, replete
Others jars seem empty
So bare and incomplete

Why are the jars not equal?
Why is it so unfair?
Is every child not worthy of
A just and equal share?

When God created people
And people walked with Him
The jars jam-packed with minutes
Were filled right to the brim

But men rebelled and squandered
Their time in selfish ways
They wasted hollow hungry years
With endless empty days

A life may last a hundred years
But never know delight
Another life a hundred days
Yet burns with passion bright

It matters not the number of
The minutes men possess
Men are measured not by years
But by the lives they bless

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Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom

11/24/12

This is just beautiful. You speak the truth in such a lovely and eloquent way. This was a delightful read and I could see it comforting many people who have lost a loved one too soon.

Lillian Rhoades

11/25/12

Many thoughts to ponder. A great message clearly spelled out in impressive rhyme. Nice.

Loren T. Lowery

11/26/12

Your poem is profound and surely a comfort to all who consider life to be too fleeting. Your last line sums it up beautifully.

11/27/12

A short, sweet challenge that reflects Abraham's covenant - to be blessed in order to be a blessing.

11/27/12

I LOVED this poem, both for its lyrical, smoothly-flowing style and for its insightful, profound message! It is a favorite of mine this week, and I wouldn't be surprised at all to find it in the top ten! These last two stanzas really blessed me:

"A life may last a hundred years
But never know delight
Another life a hundred days
Yet burns with passion bright

It matters not the number of
The minutes men possess
Men are measured not by years
But by the lives they bless"

Excellent job with this perfectly-on-topic piece! :)

11/27/12

This piece will touch many, it did me...thanks!
God bless~

11/28/12

It flowed beautifully all the way through. Splendid and insightful poem!

11/28/12

This poem struck me deeply as in all great poetry. The last two sections were outstanding. Beautiful!

11/29/12

This is a lovely poem with a great message. These lines are very sad ones:
'A life may last a hundred years
But never know delight'. Hopefully few people experience such a dire life. Your message is overall positive and challenging. Thanks.

11/29/12

I love it when I'm right!! :D I had commented earlier that I wouldn't be surprised to find this excellent poem in the top ten!! :) CONGRATULATIONS!! It's a great piece! WAY TO WRITE!!

Margaret Kearley

11/29/12

What a wonderful poem. Congratulations on your EC Melanie and thank you for these amazing thoughts - I love
It matters not the number of
The minutes men possess
Men are measured not by years
But by the lives they bless

11/29/12

Now I remember I wanted to comment on this the first time I read it but got distracted. This flows beautifully with rich writing and a wonderful message. Congratulations!

11/30/12

Your words are beautiful, gorgeous actually. Wow! Though sad, I love the sound of this phrase, "hollow hungry years." Congratulations, Melanie, on your Editor's Choice award.

Darlene Dittmer

12/04/12

I enjoyed this poem better than any in this area of writing -- well done!