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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Exhale (08/15/13)

TITLE: Whale tips
By Ellen Carr
08/22/13


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Just south of the tropics,
swimming in the sea,
mother whale and baby -
baby learner, teacher she.

“Stay close by me, baby
watch me, feed from me.
Learn our whale behaviours
before you must swim free.

Born with length two metres,
nine hundred kilograms,
you're still my little baby
(though not the sort for prams.)

Six months you'll be beside me,
grow bigger every day,
developing those whale-ish ways
stamped in your DNA.

Created to be grandiose,
designed for oceans deep,
you'll learn to breach and tail lob.
You'll learn to never sleep.

You need to surface frequently
between each dip and dive.
Half your brain must stay awake
so breath keeps you alive.

A blowhole is your breathing pipe,
peculiar to a whale.
You make a geyser when you blow,
each time that you exhale.

I'll teach you, son, a whaley song
of cadence and of love,
a song to sing for company,
a gifting from above.

We'll travel the Australian coast.
We'll reach Antarctic water.
When we return you'll be full-grown
and I may birth a daughter.

Though you'll be huge and humpy-backed,
though you'll be full of play,
I'll still be your whale mum
Until my dying day."


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CD (Camille) Swanson 08/22/13
Awww. Light, playful, and a complete delight to read!

God Bless~
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 08/24/13
I love this piece. You made it seem so real. The last line really got me because today marks 20 years since I lost my mom. Your line reminded me that she may be gone, but her love endures.
CD (Camille) Swanson 08/29/13
Congrats! God bless~
Margaret Kearley 08/29/13
'Whale'-done! - congrats on your EC. What a great poem!
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 08/29/13
Congratulations! Happy Dance!!
Leola Ogle 08/29/13
Congratulations, Ellen, on your well-deserved placement! God bless!
Nancy Bucca08/29/13
This is so cute. I thought of doing something about a whale, but I'm glad I didn't. You did a great job with this. Congrats.
Charla Diehl 08/29/13
This would make a cute, illustrated book for children. I enjoyed the simplicity of this entry. Congrats!
Linda Goergen08/29/13
Congratulations on your well deserved EC win Ellen! This poem was adorable with such vivid imagery! I loved it and agree it would make a delightful children’s book!
Bea Edwards 08/30/13
Precious and delightful to read.
Well done and congrats!