The Official Writing Challenge
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01/29/10
Okay, you got me:) Didn't expect that ending. lol
It was a cute story. I was on the edge of my chair. I didn't expect that ending at all.
Glad it was just a nightmare. My heart started racing as the guys drew closer to her. I wonder if she'll go out and buy that GPS. Well written, with great flow.
02/01/10
LOL... love the "rescue" ending. :) I was worried the storekeeper was going to spit tobacco on the floor. :) You have some great descriptions in this, especially the inside of the "general store."
Your descriptions and characterizations are great. I'm glad for the unexpected twist at the end.
02/03/10
The scenes inside the store were riveting. And you took it to the edge, where she was awakened, masterfully! I had to read the first two paragraphs slowly to get a clear picture of what was happening, so they weren't as satisfying to me as the rest of the piece. Intriguing story!
Oh, chilling! The descriptions had me on the edge of my chair...pleased it ended well.