The Official Writing Challenge
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05/16/09
You've accomplished quite a poetic work with your alliteration. Great use of contrasts with sorrow and hope. The use of "purpose" and "planned" in your repeating stanzas is powerful.
05/17/09
"A little pitchy", as Randy, (the judge on American Idol) might say. In other words - not a very smooth rhythmic beat. Honestly (a la Simon Cowell), I didn't understand the intention or some of the descriptive words. I'm only a reader, not a judge, and I'm definitely no Einstein on poetry...so don't lose heart. Keep on doing your thing, and God Bless!
05/18/09
You put alot of work into it and covered alot of time/territory. The message is very good and comes across well. I struggled alittle with the meter or something. But I enjoyed it.
Mona
Your poetry is way above my level; I admit I really didn't understand most of it, so it would be unfair of me to critique it!