The Official Writing Challenge
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06/05/08
I especially love that last little bit, and that last line is wonderful. Nice how you wove those actions mentioned at the end into your story. Well done.
06/07/08
This is lovely - great descriptions and sense of place especially. Loved the end as well. Wonderfully done.
06/08/08
Atmospheric, lyrical...beautiful.
06/08/08
This was so lovely, it actually brought tears to my eyes. Loved it...
06/08/08
!Maravilloso escritura! --I hope I said that right. :) Your double message is great.
"a spiral of smoke on a twig." WOW!

Your skill is obvious here. The images you portrayed are exquisite!