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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: The Family Home (05/29/08)

TITLE: Perfectly Drawn
By Holly Westefeld
06/05/08


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Perfectly Drawn

Though few truly plan to construct on the sand
A home, which soon crumbles and falls,
A solid foundation of faith must be laid
In stone, which supports lasting walls.

The rock is the Word of Creator and Lord,
Whose blueprint is perfectly drawn,
But some think that they know a much better way,
And end up the enemy's pawn.

It starts far ahead of the blessed marriage bed,
With purity lived every day,
For body or eyes which imbibe Satan's lies,
Lead oft to contentment decay.

It's foolish to build it with one who's not filled
With faith in foundational stone;
While you raise a wall, they will cause it to fall,
And drive you your choice to bemoan.

But equally partnered, of one mind and heart,
Construction will duly proceed;
Yes, obstacles rise, but the blueprint supplies
The plan for each home to succeed.

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""Therefore everyone who hears these words of mine and puts them into practice is like a wise man who built his house on the rock. The rain came down, the streams rose, and the winds blew and beat against that house; yet it did not fall, because it had its foundation on the rock. But everyone who hears these words of mine and does not put them into practice is like a foolish man who built his house on sand. The rain came down, the streams rose, and the winds blew and beat against that house, and it fell with a great crash."" Matthew 7:24-7 NIV


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Jan Ackerson 06/05/08
Oh, excellent! I love the internal rhyme, the intelligent word choices, your use of all of the tools in a master poet's workbox. And to top it off, an important and timely lesson...this one deserves a round of applause.
Debbie Wistrom06/08/08
What a lesson!

This should be included in all pre-marriage counselling!

This is truly wonderful.
Joanne Sher 06/08/08
VERY nicely done, and the enjambment is especially effective in the first stanza for setting off the contrast you make.

Glad you made it in "under the wire." Good stuff!
Chely Roach06/08/08
I truly loved this...beautiful and honest. (Loved the title, too!)
Deborah Engle 06/08/08
Very nice.
Beth LaBuff 06/08/08
Your rhyme and meter are as perfect as the message. I love the architectural metaphor in this. This is a truly enjoyable read.
Lyn Churchyard06/09/08
This is great. I loved the rhythm, the words flowed and the lesson is taught. Beautifully done.
Norma-Anne Hough 06/09/08
What a beautiful message for us all. I loved the flow.
Norms
Sara Harricharan 06/09/08
This is great! I liked the last verse best of all, nice job! ^_^
Joshua Janoski06/11/08
Wow. I'm impressed. I doubt I'll ever be able to write poetry like this, but it was a joy getting to read what you crafted. Well done. :)
Aaron Morrow06/11/08
Beatifully constructed poem and outstanding message. Great job!
K. J. Cash06/11/08
Confirming once again, your gift for perfect titles.

I wish more people understood the moral of this. Life long consequences follow those who lack understanding.

Sometimes, I guess, it seems to take those life long consequences give us understanding. I hope someone will hear this message and be wise. It's a great contribution to the world. Thanks!