The Official Writing Challenge
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06/05/08
Oh, excellent! I love the internal rhyme, the intelligent word choices, your use of all of the tools in a master poet's workbox. And to top it off, an important and timely lesson...this one deserves a round of applause.
What a lesson!

This should be included in all pre-marriage counselling!

This is truly wonderful.
06/08/08
VERY nicely done, and the enjambment is especially effective in the first stanza for setting off the contrast you make.

Glad you made it in "under the wire." Good stuff!
06/08/08
I truly loved this...beautiful and honest. (Loved the title, too!)
06/08/08
Very nice.
06/08/08
Your rhyme and meter are as perfect as the message. I love the architectural metaphor in this. This is a truly enjoyable read.
This is great. I loved the rhythm, the words flowed and the lesson is taught. Beautifully done.
What a beautiful message for us all. I loved the flow.
Norms
06/09/08
This is great! I liked the last verse best of all, nice job! ^_^
Wow. I'm impressed. I doubt I'll ever be able to write poetry like this, but it was a joy getting to read what you crafted. Well done. :)
06/11/08
Beatifully constructed poem and outstanding message. Great job!
06/11/08
Confirming once again, your gift for perfect titles.

I wish more people understood the moral of this. Life long consequences follow those who lack understanding.

Sometimes, I guess, it seems to take those life long consequences give us understanding. I hope someone will hear this message and be wise. It's a great contribution to the world. Thanks!