The Official Writing Challenge
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01/24/08
Loved it :) especially the bit about climbing into the choocolate wrapper.
01/24/08
Now why are you talking about me? Good stuff.
I really really like this - can relate to each verse. You've pretty much captured the whole dieters experience here. In the end, one change at a time. This is a fun read with some really good advice. Portion control, portion control, portion control.
Cute title and fun poem. How appropriate for January!
01/25/08
Just great! Thanks for the smiles, and the lesson.
I enjoyed this fun and well-crafted poem.
Personally, I would have appreciated some more conventional punctuation.
01/26/08
very very well done!
01/27/08
So why am I sitting here typing instead of exercising? :-D
Great poem. Perfect for this time of year.
01/30/08
Good grief, have you been spying on me? That's just eerie!

Really, really good poem--I loved every stanza.
01/30/08
This is brilliant!

My fav line:
The week goes by, and finally ends
A fraught and fretful time
Into a chocolate wrapper she
Would dearly love to climb


Darling. Convicting.

01/30/08
Heehee, this was good, I liked the line with trying to swim in the pool. That's what usually happens when I try. Good job! ^_^
01/30/08
What fun! Your rhyme and meter are perfect (but you already knew that). I totally enjoyed your creative approach to the topic (with an entry many of us can relate to. :) )
01/31/08
Oh, so funny! You have exactly caught the hidden moments we ladies go through to keep and get fit! Love the whole thing.
01/31/08
Congratulations on your EC!!!! Bet you're losing it now! ;)
01/31/08
****Congrats!***
Congratulations on EC for this most delightful poem/
Great title that portrayed the conflict in your poem! I can relate, especially to the man in the pool.