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This has the makings of a great novel. I believe in fate and fate seems to be knocking at your MC's door.
I also believe, as your MC does, that her parents' prayers are being answered.
Wonderful, engaging, hopeful story.
09/21/07
I've been there. I could feel what she felt. I loved it. Beautifully written.
09/22/07
Wonderful descriptions - and I love all the parallels. This absolutely begs to be fleshed out and expanded. You really only touched the surface - but what can you do with the word limit, eh? Your last line, however, is perfect.
09/22/07
I really enjoyed this story! The characters come alive through description and dialogue--I can see and hear the helpful blond "giant" and feel with the main character.

Intriguing message about two different things in Catherine's life that need "fixing"--both physical and emotional. Great parallel drawn here!
09/22/07
This is a great story. I wish I could read many more chapters about this MC and her journey to find her lost spiritual life. The added spice of a handsome stranger is a bonus!
09/24/07
I agree -- this sounds like the makings of a wonderful novella. I'd love to hear more of the story. Good job.
09/24/07
Beautifully crafted, and a wonderful story. The spiritual insight she was given from hearing she needed to fix her bearings was great! Loved the ending. Excellent! :) Cat
You have excellent story writing abililty. A few sentences could have been shortened to make them more effective. Still, I enjoyed this very much.
09/26/07
Beautiful writing! What a great story. Love the "bearings".

We have a swamp cooler too. :)
Congratulations on your placing - this was a great story and has a lot of potential for expansion as well. Keep writing! Loren
Absolutely excellent. Congrats on your placing. Well done and definitely deserving.
09/27/07
Congratulations on your 2nd place. I really enjoyed this story.