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09/20/07
This is great. You really held my attention. Let's hope the guard finds TRUE calm through these prisoners!
09/21/07
Unique and well written story. Good job.
09/22/07
A beautiful story! I felt as though I were there--the descriptions and dialogue make the prison come alive.

Great portrayal of contrast between the lewdness of the "normal" prisoners and the calm and inner peace of the persecuted believers.

The intriguing title also sparked my curiosity.

Great job!
09/23/07
This is wonderful, intense, futuristic, I loved it. Welcome to the puppy pen.
09/24/07
What I liked about this was the way that you resisted the temptation to have the guard convert straight away. This kept the writing tense with a rawness to the closing comments.
09/24/07
Wow - so VERY descriptive and evocative. A very powerful piece.
09/24/07
Definitely high-caliber writing here! One of my faves this week.
This is one my very favorites this week, also. Wow.

I live in a prison town and I've heard stories from the guards. Your describtions are awesome.

I felt your MC's turmoil. I saw the calm from Prisoner 0235098.

GREAT WRITING!
Very creative--great job. I love the story!
The guard's emotions are vivid and the message is very clear. Excellent writing and right on topic.
10/09/07
People accuse me of having more story to tell--same here. This is a cyberpunk or at least dystopian novel waiting to happen.

Enemies of the State unite!

Faith,
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