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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Search Engine (10/06/11)
I sit here in my emptiness
Lost in every way.
Silently I look for God
But don’t know how to pray.

Is He really out there?
Can He see this man?
Will He save me from my life
As I change back into sand?

Thoughts of all my yesterdays
Cause me to hide in shame.
Wandering through this place.
Calling out His name.

Then one day I found it
As I searched the web.
All I asked was who was God
And this is what it said

Is God in existence?
Fifty ways to prove he’s not.
Even an interview with Him
This is what I got.

This was so depressing
I cried into the night.
Is there no one out there
To help me with this plight?

Then one day I found it
Laying dusty on the shelf
A book they called the Bible
It brought me back to health.

It is my new search engine.
It helps me on my way.
It has shown me what is needed
Teaching me what to say.

I know my Father loves me
He answers all my prayers.
Cause even when I doubted
He still was there to care.
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Gwen Plauche
10/21/11
This is a well written poem with concise use of words to communicate your message. Keep up the great work!
Catherine Maher
10/21/11
This brought tears to my eyes. Very good job. On topic, wonderful flow from start to end. So moving to recall how the answers are right there in our Bibles. Even in technology is down, we can ALWAYS pick up our bible. Keep writing more.
C D Swanson 
10/21/11
Beautifully written and more important the meaning that God is our everything-computers will crash-new ones come along, so on and so forth. But, God is our ever constant presence,and never changes - he is always there. I loved this!

Keep on writing you clearly have the gift. Nice job. God Bless you~
Jan Ackerson
10/22/11
Very good at criteria #3 (on topic)--you found the way to make a very contemporary topic timeless.

I'd consider this somewhat weaker on criteria #2 (unique, fresh, memorable), as it's the sort of poem that we often see here. Consider adding some sort of unexpected twist or fresh language to make your poetry stand out.

Another strength: #6 (communication, clarity). This poem communicates beautifully, and touches the readers' hearts.
Mona Purvis
10/22/11
A lot can be said for simplicity. It's often underated. Your work here is simple, but lovely. It is a good entry for the challenge and I think would do well on point #8, publishable.

Mona
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 
10/23/11
This is really lovely and spoke to my heart. I liked how you used the search engine and God as a search engine. There have been a few others with this message but you did a nice job. I did struggle understanding the line with interview in it, but overall enjoyed this.
Linda Goergen
10/23/11
I really liked this, the beauty of that old bible will never fade and its truths never change or waver with whatever is politically correct at the moment! It truly is the best search engine in existence! I wholeheartedly agree with Mona, simple often has a powerful impact – as did your poem! Its simple truth just simply connects with the heart of the reader! This was a joy to read! Good job! Blessings!
Mildred Sheldon
10/31/11
This is a beautiful heart felt poem. Thank you for sharing.