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Cute story.
A beautiful message and a lovely story. I enjoyed its significant meaning and loved the ending especially.

Thank you.

God bless~
This is a cute story. Nothing like love to make us want to look better and feel better.

One thing you may want to try I'd to do more showing than telling. Instead of Sheila was on a diet try something like Feeling determined this time, Sheila passed on the dessert and grabbed a carrot to crunch on. That's not the best example but I hope it shows you what I mean.

You did a great job of covering the topic. This is a delightful read and has an important message. Nice Job.
Amen to that! It is certainly true that God looks on the inside; however, as long as we're on the subject, our bodies are His temple so we should watch our diets. I think this entry had a good message as well as for us to remember that God loves us no matter what. I enjoyed your story very much!