The Official Writing Challenge
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09/20/05
I liked 'a sob dented the musty air'. I could see myself with them. Thanks!
09/21/05
I agree that your dialog was authentic, and gave your characters distinct and likeable personalities. It would be easier to follow who's talking if you added a bit more description to the dialog, though. Warm, witty piece.