The Official Writing Challenge
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09/19/05
The large blocks of text are rather intimidating. You might do better to leave lines between the paragraphs.
09/21/05
Very eloquent description; I felt relaxed just reading it. You switched from past to present tense, which was slightly disorienting. I'd love to retreat there!
09/27/05
Kathyryn, I did have a chuckle over the title (glad you explained). This was an enjoyable read with a lovely sentiment. I definitely related to it.

One thing to remember when writing dialogue, make sure you start a new paragraph each time the person speaking changes. Otherwise it gets quite confusing for the reader.

Anyway, you rated very well with the Level 2 judges, so I hope we'll see more from you in the Challenge in the future. With love, Deb (Challenge Coordinator)

10/13/05
Hi Kathryn. I'm not sure if you have Private Messenger or not, so I thought I'd best leave a message for you here. Could you please send me a Private Message as soon as you see this? I need to let you know something about your entry in the Fruit Challenge. With love, Deb (Challenge Coordinator)