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An interesting manner of arranging the longer sentences.

I believe Question mark missing on first sentence.

I am not sure what rhythm I should use during the reading if any.

Artistic poems can be hard to develop the best form and rhythm.
07/26/13
Nice imagery in this poem.

Next week's lesson on the writing forums of this site is on writing free verse; you might want to check it out for some ideas for adding to your poetic repertoire. It goes up on Monday morning.

I enjoyed reading this, and look forward to more of your poetry on this site.

07/30/13
Enjoyed this very much. Beautiful poem, good job:)
This is a nice poem. It has a lot of depth to it and could be reread several times and I think each time the reader would discover something new. Nice job.
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