The Official Writing Challenge
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This almost seems like a quick trip to the Thesaurus or a short family biography.

I found it difficult to see the intended direction.

You did use a variety of similar terms which could be used for the word expand.

Interesting piece though.
07/25/13
This felt more like free verse poetry than prose--but it doesn't LOOK like poetry. I recommend avoiding definitions, especially of terms that your readers are certainly familiar with.

Your writing is full of wonderful images and turns of phrase, and I'm excited to see how it develops.
07/29/13
Thanks for sharing and keep writing. Maybe the next topic will be more fun for you to explore your creativity.
07/30/13
Enjoyed this stream of consciousness kind of essay. Good treatment of the topic.
This is interesting. You tackled the topic in a different way and make some nice imagery while you do it. I do wonder if formatting it more like a traditional poem might help the reader see your vision. I think you have a creative thought process and the more you write the more you will expand your ability to reach others with your words. Nicely done.