The Official Writing Challenge
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What a detective! (I mean, "What? A detctive?) Funny.
When I first started reading I thought maybe you'd missed last week's challenge. LOL!
I found this very funny, and I can just imagine Miss Terry's face as the two students were being interrogated and the tone of her voice with that last comment. Well done.
04/21/07
Great writing here! Love every word of it!
04/22/07
Quite clever!

A little tightening here and there would benefit this lighthearted caper, but all in all it's quite delightful. Lots of great sentences to love.
04/23/07
So cute and fun! Definitely gave me the giggles.
04/23/07
This is really clever, charming and funny. I loved the paragraph of positive reinforcements the detective had received in the past and the description of the suspects. Great job. I hope you do really well!
04/23/07
Your gift for writing really shines! Delightful and fun read!
04/25/07
That was a thoroughly enjoyable, fast paced read. Very witty. Wonderful vocabulary. My only quibble: one run on sentence: 'Through utilizing my impressive skills of deduction, well it’s really more like subtraction, the suspects in the class were quickly whittled down as I do not have the time or patience necessary to interview 22 second graders.' Short sentences heighten the tension and keep the reader pushing forward. I don't think you'll be hanging around in beginners for long. yeggy
04/25/07
A delightful offering. Thanx.
Absolutely loved it. Great style. Great "detective" character. Definitely wonderful writing. Enjoyed it very much. Pam
04/25/07
lol -this could have fit in Mystery as well :)
What a fun read! I love the "criminal" names you gave the two little boys. Very well done.
04/25/07
Great narration, alliteration, and pace. Quite funny, and an all around fun read!
04/25/07
Very funny and with a nice bit of mystery to boot. I wish the mystery element had been drawn out a tad bit more (but that's just the detective in me! ^_^)
Cute wordplay with the names too.
Very clever entry--I loved the skills of "subtraction.!
04/25/07
Very amusing. I'll bet he was in the doghouse with Miss Terry for awhile
04/25/07
A few speedbumps, but I enjoyed the entry. Very good job. Nice story development, a little work on presentation and this would be even more entertaining. God bless.
04/26/07
Congrats on your win!!
This flowed so quickly and showed a geat deal of "witful" skill. Congratulations on your win!
Congratulationss on your ribbon and EC placement. I guess I'll be seeing you in Level two.
I really liked your story by the way. Very clever.
I enjoyed your story! Your character is great! Any potential for a series??? Congrats on placing second!
Iloved this story!