The Official Writing Challenge
BACK TO
CHALLENGE
MAIN
INSTRUCTIONS
how it works
submission rules
guidelines for
choosing a level
ENTRIES
submit your entry
read current entries
read past entries
challenge winners
Our Daily Devotional HERE
Place it on your site or
receive it daily by email.


TRUST JESUS TODAY

  • Share
  • how it works
  • Submit
Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Lifeguard (11/09/06)
He told me that he loved me eternally
I believed him without question
Stupid?
No, just my first time

I thought
“I have no reason to doubt him”

No
I had reason
My gut

So why didn’t I listen?
Have you ever wanted a dream to come true so bad?
That’s why

He told me that he couldn’t wait to spend his life with me.

When I tried to leave
He told me that he would never EVER stop loving me and that he honestly wouldn’t mind spending his whole life with me
Liar
I knew that
But I believed him anyway

I even wrote a song about him

I was so mad at GOD for not giving me what I wanted.
Stupid me.

I wanted to die
Said I couldn’t live without him
Idiotic

Now nothing shakes me anymore because through all the lessons that I’ve learned in life, I’ve learned the most important one of all - -> To Trust My God with all of my heart and with EVERY area of my life. GOD always knows best.

Holy Spirit
Thank you for being such an amazing lifeguard.

“*Smile*, Anytime.”
The opinions expressed by authors may not necessarily reflect the opinion of FaithWriters.com.
If you died today, are you absolutely certain that you would go to heaven? You can be right now. CLICK HERE

JOIN US at FaithWriters for Free. Grow as a Writer and Spread the Gospel.
This article has been read 1009 times
Member Comments
Member
Date
Jan Ackerson
11/18/06
This poem communicates heartbreak and healing very effectively.

Think about re-doing the *smile* Any time bit at the end--I think it's fine to end with a word from God, but this way of doing it doesn't really fit with the modd of the rest of your emotional poem.

This poem really bared your soul, and I thank you for having the courage to share it with us.
Jan Ackerson
11/18/06
Sorry, I meant "mood", not "modd."
Donna Powers
11/18/06
This is something that can be understood by anyone whose heart has been broken. You conveyed your feelings well and concluded with hope in the Lord. Keep writing!
Catrina Bradley
11/21/06
Your poem really touched me. These line resonate:

So why didn’t I listen?
Have you ever wanted a dream to come true so bad?
That’s why

So true of anyone who's wanted that dream to come true. Thank you for sharing your heart.