The Official Writing Challenge
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11/17/06
This poem communicates heartbreak and healing very effectively.

Think about re-doing the *smile* Any time bit at the end--I think it's fine to end with a word from God, but this way of doing it doesn't really fit with the modd of the rest of your emotional poem.

This poem really bared your soul, and I thank you for having the courage to share it with us.
11/17/06
Sorry, I meant "mood", not "modd."
11/18/06
This is something that can be understood by anyone whose heart has been broken. You conveyed your feelings well and concluded with hope in the Lord. Keep writing!
11/21/06
Your poem really touched me. These line resonate:

So why didnít I listen?
Have you ever wanted a dream to come true so bad?
Thatís why

So true of anyone who's wanted that dream to come true. Thank you for sharing your heart.