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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Lifeguard (11/09/06)

TITLE: CRAZY IN LOVE
By lydia kasumba
11/13/06


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He told me that he loved me eternally
I believed him without question
Stupid?
No, just my first time

I thought
ďI have no reason to doubt himĒ

No
I had reason
My gut

So why didnít I listen?
Have you ever wanted a dream to come true so bad?
Thatís why

He told me that he couldnít wait to spend his life with me.

When I tried to leave
He told me that he would never EVER stop loving me and that he honestly wouldnít mind spending his whole life with me
Liar
I knew that
But I believed him anyway

I even wrote a song about him

I was so mad at GOD for not giving me what I wanted.
Stupid me.

I wanted to die
Said I couldnít live without him
Idiotic

Now nothing shakes me anymore because through all the lessons that Iíve learned in life, Iíve learned the most important one of all - -> To Trust My God with all of my heart and with EVERY area of my life. GOD always knows best.

Holy Spirit
Thank you for being such an amazing lifeguard.

ď*Smile*, Anytime.Ē


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Jan Ackerson 11/17/06
This poem communicates heartbreak and healing very effectively.

Think about re-doing the *smile* Any time bit at the end--I think it's fine to end with a word from God, but this way of doing it doesn't really fit with the modd of the rest of your emotional poem.

This poem really bared your soul, and I thank you for having the courage to share it with us.
Jan Ackerson 11/17/06
Sorry, I meant "mood", not "modd."
Donna Emery11/18/06
This is something that can be understood by anyone whose heart has been broken. You conveyed your feelings well and concluded with hope in the Lord. Keep writing!
Catrina Bradley 11/21/06
Your poem really touched me. These line resonate:

So why didnít I listen?
Have you ever wanted a dream to come true so bad?
Thatís why

So true of anyone who's wanted that dream to come true. Thank you for sharing your heart.