The Official Writing Challenge
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This poem communicates heartbreak and healing very effectively.

Think about re-doing the *smile* Any time bit at the end--I think it's fine to end with a word from God, but this way of doing it doesn't really fit with the modd of the rest of your emotional poem.

This poem really bared your soul, and I thank you for having the courage to share it with us.
Sorry, I meant "mood", not "modd."
This is something that can be understood by anyone whose heart has been broken. You conveyed your feelings well and concluded with hope in the Lord. Keep writing!
Your poem really touched me. These line resonate:

So why didnít I listen?
Have you ever wanted a dream to come true so bad?
Thatís why

So true of anyone who's wanted that dream to come true. Thank you for sharing your heart.