The Official Writing Challenge
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05/11/16
The candy-problem came to a critical, unexpected end in your story. You expressed the usual danger of too eating many sweets by adding another risk that is seldom thought of. I wonder if that was based on experience. Well written.
05/11/16
Well written and well done.

Blessings~
05/12/16
I liked the conflicts. It brings a lot of truths to mind.
Congratulations on ranking 11th overall. Happy Dance!