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This story is so very real. I was right there with each character. So much stuffed into 750 words. Awesome work. I love how you ended it with the poem and the woman recognizing the girl's love language. And the title is perfection!
The pain and emotion of your MC are so well conveyed here and is balanced perfectly by the compassion shown by the foster mother. Heart-warming! Excellent writing!
Love, love, LOVE this story! I can see both of them vividly. This pairing definitely seems like a God-thing! I'd love to read Chapter 2.
Great job of showing your characters---and of making your reader care about both of them. I like the poem at the end.
Wonderful story,full of heart. Blessings, Ruth
Mari: Your writing always has such a real tone to it and takes the reader right into the scene. Great job on this one!
You presented both characters in first person and it worked to make the story even more dramatic. I was also seeing the battle going on so well in each life. Very well done.

Wow! The emotion here is so incredibly real and poignant, I felt that I knew these two characters. They definitely need each other. Powerful, deeply felt writing... very well done.
Truly excellent. Loved the contrasting voices of the characters, and the hint of a redemptive ending. Fantastic.
Such real and believable characters. The contrast between the two "voices" makes this piece even more powerful. I really like how you don't have a quick and happy ending. This is tough love in action, ready to hang in there through thick and thin. You are a great writer.
This really got me. I have no idea how to write about it. Really good!
This moved me beyond words!
This touched me on so many levels. You did both voices justice. Small red ink-pus has one s (You used 2) The story was so riveting. I was drawn in and had empathy for both characters.
How very original and how very heart warming!
Love your writing gift! Congratulations! Hugs, Rita
Congratulations for placing in the top 15 of your level and for the Editor's Choice.
Marita, very nice blend on your writing. I like your style. Congrats on your finish!
Wow! You could feel the emotions...snot-bubbles and all. The two POV's worked great, plus a poem, to boot!
Well done!
So PROUD of you! Congratulations on a well-deserved EC!!! Fantastic way to start the new quarter!