The Official Writing Challenge
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The style of this piece puts me in mind of a good advice columnist and friend. You got your point across well--creatively, while entertaining. Good work.
Push me into the pool? Love it! Great call to action in this writing.
There have been many times I now wish someone had pushed me into a pool. I really enjoyed this fine write and the message you send is priceless!
Now this is my kind of story! The fictional part of this story had me on the edge of my seat and wondering how far things would go before she realized what was going on / heed the advice given. The language you used to describe this girl, the way she walked, was dressed and carried herself were priceless. But my favorite part of this piece was the truly authentic, vulnerable, devotional ending you gave to it. This piece is so publishable (as is) and needs to be in a magazine somewhere. I hope FW will recognize that and you will receive and EC. Well done -- just loved this.
Hahahahaha...Great last line! Enjoyed it!

God bless~
Interesting way to do a devotion piece. I haven't read one that starts with a fiction story, and uses it to illustrate the message of the devotion. Good job with tying it all together.
Priceless piece of writing.
You had me grinning ear to ear and then whoomp you snuck (oh what is the past tense of sneak) in a bit of sage advise.
Your title caught my attention, and the piece kept me reading to the end. You impart some wonderful wisdom. We've all needed to be thrown in the pool a time or two. Thank you for the call to action.
I am so glad you threw a brick! I can only echo the other reviewers - and if this does not receive an Editors' Choice Award, I may give up writing. This is so delightful and so true.
I must add that my heart is offering firm friendship to you as we totally share the same values.
What an intriguing title! What an exciting story! What a powerful message! What an amusing ending! :) Your powers of description were "on fire," too, and I especially loved the line: "Her long dress swooshed as she sauntered through the resort like a pink peony swaying in the wind." Great job!
This was excellent. A wonderful parable and explanation. Good job!
Congratulations! I am doing my happy dance for you! This was out of the box and a terrific message. Your transition from story to message was fantastic too. Well done!
Hearty CONGRATULATIONS on your E.C. win for this excellent piece with its powerful message!
Yea!!! The judges saw what a gem of a piece this is. Way to write. I would so totally buy a book of yours! Have a blessed day in the marvelous dance of life our Lord has given to us, each one.
Wow, what an interesting story; keeps you at the edge of your seat. And what an important message too!
Brilliant piece of writing. Congrats on your EC and 2nd place win. From the title to ending the entire story was outstanding. Loved the fiction to devotion style. The descriptions were vivid and the message hard-hitting. So well done - congrats again!
Congratulations on you EC! Great job!
Fantastic! Congratulations!
I enjoyed this very much and appreciated the humor mixed in with the important message. Congratulations.
Great story, great truths!! Thanks so much and CONGRATULATIONS!!