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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Hacker or Virus (computer) (12/15/11)

TITLE: Identity Theft
By Benjamin Graber
12/22/11


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I thought she was my friend,
So I invited her into
The living room of my heart,
To sip coffee
And nibble on dainty pieces of gossip,
Like good friends do.

Little did I know—
As she shared sweet morsels of friendship
She furtively gobbled up scraps of detail
To use for her own gain.
Every smile she gave me
Was a lie,
To persuade me
To let down my guard.

She used the details that she gained
To hack into the profile
Of my life.
Once she gained access,
She stole my innermost secrets,
Daring to rape
My very soul.

She took my treasures,
Distorted them with spray paint,
And shackled them in the stocks
Of the marketplace,
Baring my soul
To the scorn
Of society.

My shattered dreams lie broken
In the dungeons
Of the inquisitors,
And I am left with the choice
To either build a fortress
For warding off all friendships
And guarding my ruined heart,
Or to end my misery
Once and for all.


Social and relational bullying is as real and as harmful as physical bullying, even if it does not look as destructive from the outside. According to studies, bully victims are 2 to 9 times as likely to commit suicide, and at least half of suicides among young people are related to bullying.


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CD Swanson 12/29/11
This was a well written and a bold commentary of society today. Nicely done, good story and fabulous metaphors throughout! Great job.
God Bless~
bo Jennings12/29/11
Toward the middle I loved the sic-Fi feeling, the intrigue started holding me like a suspencful piñacle. I wish you kept on with that hook that brought me into your story.
Whoever said Christian writers can't be exciting? I don't know. But, you have the ability to capture your audience. Keep it up.
Blessings
bo Jennings12/29/11
I'm so sorry but my comment was to be written on another' s work. My cell must have deviated. Sorry my above post dismiss. Thanks and God bless
Kelvin Fowler12/30/11
Good message, good poem, well done
Allison Egley 12/30/11
Oh wow. This is so powerful! Very nice job with this entry, and you point to a very real and scary problem in our society today.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 01/04/12
This is so intense. It gave me goosebumps. The use of the word rape spoke volumes. The ending paragraph didn't quite seem to fit to me as I saw this as a hacker more than a bully.But the message is great and the topic spot on.
Linda Goergen01/04/12
Very powerful, well written poem!
Cheryl von Drehle 01/05/12
powerful use of language and metaphor
Amanda Brogan01/05/12
You captured the feelings of betrayal perfectly. I also liked the part at the end about cyber bullying. Sobering message. Well done!