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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Grandparent(s) (04/03/08)

TITLE: Forever is our Hope
By Benjamin Graber
04/04/08


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The lonely sound of crashing waves,
Which echo as they fall in place
As if a chain of dominos
Was knocked away from my embrace…

The memories fall one by one,
As vivid as the ocean’s voice;
’Twas you who made each one, with love,
Since I was just a care-free boy…

You loved this place; so much, in fact,
The waves themselves have sung your dirge;
And here I listen to the song
And dreams of you become an urge…

I know you’ll walk this beach again,
But all life’s cares won’t wear you down;
The moon will sparkle bright with joy,
The waves will sing a different tune…

My heart is stinging with my pain,
But it’s not mingled with despair,
Because forever is our hope:
We can’t imagine all that God’s prepared…

And someday…
Someday…
Love will take us home…
And it’s this hope that makes us strong…

For now, my hope is joined by tears,
I join the ocean’s lonely song…

I miss you, Grandma…


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Patty Wysong04/10/08
This brought tears to my eyes. The image was strong and the feelings deep. Good job!
Beth LaBuff 04/10/08
This is very beautiful and tender. I love your use of the ocean, something your grandma loved, in your poem. I can almost hear the ocean in this, your descriptions are wonderful. I like this, "As if a chain of dominos -- Was knocked away from my embrace…" You've used some strong words too that make this excellent (dirge, mingled, etc.) . This tribute to your grandma is poignant and touching.
Mariane Holbrook04/10/08
This is so precious, so beautiful. I live on the beach so you can imagine how it affected me. Tremendous entry!
Dianne Janak04/10/08
Well done! Great imagery, and flow.. and feeling. This is a keeper! Great skilled writing here.
LauraLee Shaw04/13/08
My heart is stinging with my pain,
But it’s not mingled with despair,
Because forever is our hope:
We can’t imagine all that God’s prepared…

Absolutely beautiful. Well done.

Joshua Janoski04/13/08
Wow. I felt both sadness and joy in this. You are a gifted writer, and this poem demonstrates your gift.

I appreciate you sharing this, and I am sure that your grandmother is looking down smiling at you and this wonderful tribute to her.
Joy Faire Stewart04/14/08
Wonderful message of hope and beautifully written. I enjoyed reading it aloud. Perfect!
Jan Ackerson 04/14/08
I appreciate your use of near rhymes to avoid forced or awkward constructions, and your deliberate change of meter to make the reader slow down and catch the climax of your poem. Very well done.
Glynis Becker 04/14/08
Lovely poem. Descriptive and beautiful. Thanks for sharing!