The Official Writing Challenge
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01/31/08
Clever and fun - love the dog especially. Good descriptions.
Great title and descriptions, would like to know what the friends thought of the deception.
02/02/08
Very nice story - good action and dialogue. Couple of suggestions - though minor - When you said he grinned 'silently' you might want to delete silently as most grins are silent. Also try using another word for 'rest' where you used it twice in two sentences next to each other. With puncutation and quotes,place your period inside them. I told you my suggestions were minimal but if you use them in your writing it will make it shine even more! Someone here shared those same things with me once and it really helped:)) Keep writing!!
Hehe, fun story!
02/05/08
Really cute story for upper elementary students. I got a kick out of it!