The Official Writing Challenge
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You have a valid point here. I encourage you to use dialogue in your story to break up the paragraphs of narrative. Also, in your title, "affects" is the appropriate word, not "effects".
God bless.
The first part of this was very engaging, with a nostalgic feel to it. There were a few sentence fragments, and perhaps a bit of an abrupt ending. The part about your mother and brother would make a great short story.
You put a lot of thought into this article, and I encourage you to keep sharing your thoughts in your writing. You see the value in encouraging others to improve their skills. I believe you learned this trait from your mother's coping skills as she developed physical therapy to help your brother heal from his injury.