The Official Writing Challenge
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02/01/07
You have a valid point here. I encourage you to use dialogue in your story to break up the paragraphs of narrative. Also, in your title, "affects" is the appropriate word, not "effects".
God bless.
02/02/07
The first part of this was very engaging, with a nostalgic feel to it. There were a few sentence fragments, and perhaps a bit of an abrupt ending. The part about your mother and brother would make a great short story.
02/02/07
You put a lot of thought into this article, and I encourage you to keep sharing your thoughts in your writing. You see the value in encouraging others to improve their skills. I believe you learned this trait from your mother's coping skills as she developed physical therapy to help your brother heal from his injury.