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03/14/19
What a great reminder of how blessed we are. Thank you. God bless.
03/14/19
Great job with this entry.
Well done,
Blessings~
03/15/19
An excellent reminder of how blessed we really are and that God desires not only to bless us, but for us to ask.

There were a few typos and formatting issues, but overall a great devotional.
03/15/19
"...don’t let the enemy lie to you." That's the key to feeling blessed. Nice writing.
03/16/19
I like your choice of verse from Malachi. A good reminder to ‘try him’ and see what he will do.
It is true that we more freely give God the credit for that which we have asked Him to supply. Keeping that channel of supplication/thanks open is key. On a constructive note...find a way to double check your punctuation, perhaps software or maybe find someone to look over your entry before submission. Other than that-good job! Keep writing.
03/18/19
You tell it as it is! Some deep editing for punctuation is needed- perhaps have someone proofread it for you. I once read that if you read your article backwards, it's easier to catch those errors. It works for me!
This is a great devotion. You make some wonderful points throughout the piece. I know not everyone agrees with me, but I often prefer the singular first person (I) to the plural first (we) or the universal you. In this piece, you used all three, so I would definitely try to stick to just one. For example I might edit it like this: As a Christian, it’s easy for me to become entangled in the worries of this world. I worry about my job, my family, if I'll have enough money to pay all of my bills, and hundreds of other things. I soon find myself sinking from the weight on my shoulders.
Like I said, it's often a personal preference, but for me it feels more intimate this way. When you used the singular first person, I felt like we were talking one on one. Also when you use song lyrics, you should make sure you cite it in the footnote, the title and the composer, and be careful about copyright laws. Unless it's in the public domain, song lyric copyrights can be tricky. I especially liked how you ended with a prayer. So many people have no clue how to pray, so I think it's great to include a prayer. This would be a great devotion to submit to FW daily devotions after you tweak it a bit. I think your message is powerful and the FW devotions go out to thousands all over the world. Keep writing and blessing others with your word and your love of Jesus.