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TITLE: The Music Man | Previous Challenge Entry
By Lillian Jacobs
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There was a bar he liked at the end of the pier and so he stopped in for a drink. It had been a few hours since his last. It was dark and smelled of stale smoke and whiskey. “I’d like a rum and coke,” he said.
“Coming right up. Haven’t seen you in here for awhile.” the bartender said as he laid the drink down. The man drank it straight away and asked for another before the bartender had had the chance to walk away. “Where you been? Still playing?”
“Not much,” the man said. “There’s this girl.”
“Yes, a girl. I know how that goes.”
“I met her when I was playing at the Dresdan. She invited me to church.” He signaled for another drink. “She told me I was an alcoholic.”
“Well, no comment on that one” the bartender said with a laugh.
“She keeps telling me these things, but I keep calling her anyway. I don’t know. Sometimes I think I … I don’t know.” He shook his head.
“Yeah, it’s hard to know about that. You might want to steer clear of that religious scene. You don’t want to get too square.” The bartender left and the man was left with his drink.
He stared off into the distance and sighed. There had always been a song in his head. Something he was working on. It was all about his music. All of it. He sighed again. There was no song anymore, just the girl and her God. He couldn’t shake the thoughts of them no matter how hard he tried.
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Great dialogue too--the two characters came alive for me as they conversed!
Would like to see this story lengthened somehow.
Intriguing message--makes one wonder what choices the main character will make.
Good title--it sparked my curiosity!