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This is a fun poem. I can appreciate all the hazards one faces when going out into the world.

I think some of the rhythm and rhymes felt a tad forced but I struggle with that myself so I know how hard it is to perfect a piece in such a short time.

The ending surprised me. i didn't see that coming at all. I thought it would be like my house after I've spent hours and tons of money shopping someone always complains that there's nothing to eat. I like that you took me in a different direction then what I was expecting. Nice job.
That last line made me "grimace" been there, done that! LOL. Nicely done, cute poem...and an interesting way of presenting the topic.

Thanks. God bless~
Very cute poem. I can identify because I hate going to the mall now, and know what it is like to spend too much. Good job!

God Bless!
Shopping is not my favorite chore. Many of the situations you mentioned are part of the reason why.

Thanks for sharing.