The Official Writing Challenge
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This is a heart-warming story with the happy outcome not always found in life. Good way of teaching about patience through this narrative.
Sweet story.

Consider using quotation marks and dialogue tags to distinguish your speakers. And maybe some descriptions of action, to break up the monologue?

I love names like Grace, Patience, Joy...constant reminders of God.
A very sweet story that read like it was being told to the next generation.
Cute story. Other than a little missing punctuation, it was great.