The Official Writing Challenge
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This is a heart-warming story with the happy outcome not always found in life. Good way of teaching about patience through this narrative.
08/29/08
Sweet story.

Consider using quotation marks and dialogue tags to distinguish your speakers. And maybe some descriptions of action, to break up the monologue?

I love names like Grace, Patience, Joy...constant reminders of God.
08/31/08
A very sweet story that read like it was being told to the next generation.
08/31/08
Cute story. Other than a little missing punctuation, it was great.