The Official Writing Challenge
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The descriptions in this piece cause me to remember such sweet times enjoying His creation. Loved it.
08/31/06
I was there - what a wonderful picture! Good work.
Beautiful.
09/03/06
vividly described. Thank you for sharing this
Now, this I like. It is a symphony of words and almost poetry meets prose. You've done a good job.
09/05/06
What I like- this is beautiful - full of lovely descriptive words, clearly written so I could 'see' where it was taking place and feel it as well. I think your opening and closing paragraphs were well written. And the title works well too!
What I might change - just space it out for better reading. You can see your talent for words come shining through here - Nice writing!
09/06/06
I absolutely love the descriptions! Nice work!