The Official Writing Challenge
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08/31/06
I really like this, and can relate at least a little. I was homebound for awhile, after I had hip surgery in thrid grade and had to learn to walk again.
08/31/06
What I like - I loved the content and I liked your voice. You writing flows nicely. Good opening.

What I might change - The ending seemed too tied up and abrupt. I wanted to know more details on how the mother stopped drinking. Maybe a few more lines??
09/02/06
What a wonderful story of hope and prayer!! Loved your first paragraph especially! Great job!
Ditto on loving the first paragraph. Great phrasing and wordsmithing. Congratulations on your EC win. Well done.