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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Retreat (as in quiet time away) (08/01/05)
Busy, busy, busy. Working three jobs, just to make ends meet. Busy, busy, busy. The alarm goes off early, I am so tired. I know I need to get up. The day will be long, but time will go fast. I’m just so busy, busy, busy.

I forget to eat, go to the next meeting. Rush, rush, rush. Run to the bathroom, throw up what I didn’t eat, and tell myself I am just fine. Rush, rush, rush, I have a plane to catch.

The phone rings. It’s another person asking for more of my time, more of my money, more of me. Give, give, give. It sometimes feels like I have nothing left. My car breaks down, they need to replace the radiator. One hundred dollars. Give, give, give.

The ceiling rushes over my head. Fast, fast, fast. I am being wheeled on some kind of trolley. Hear voices, feel nauseous. “Get her to the operating room, stat!” Fast, fast, fast…

I wake up to the sound of a machine next to my bed. Beep, beep, beep.
I know I need to slow down. Beep, beep, beep.
My body has sounded the alarm.

I walk out the hospital room with new resolve. I step barefoot onto the green grass outside. Take in the beauty around me. Breathe in the fresh air. I walk and walk, not knowing where my legs will take me.

I book myself off for three weeks,
Peace.

I sleep for most of that time,
Peace.

I open my eyes and I am in His arms,
Peace.
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Rose Gingerich
08/08/05
You had my head spinning, around, around, around. I could feel the pressure building. We need to take time out to find that peace before we are stopped. Good story/article.
Blessings,
Rose
Debra Brand 
08/08/05
We've all been in this place. Thanks for putting it into words.
Jan Ackerson
08/08/05
Very effective use of repitition. Effective, effective, effective!
Linda Watson Owen
08/08/05
You really captured the sense of hurrying! I agree--effective!
Nina Phillips
08/09/05
Yes, I believe you captured the sense of the hurried times we live in. Peace! amen.
God bless ya, littlelight
Shirley Thomas
08/09/05
Sounds like our lives doesn't it? We have to have the peace of God, the rest of God. Thanks for sharing a beautiful story of reality.
dub W
08/11/05
This is a gem. The repetition makes it great. Thanks.
Shannon Redmon
08/11/05
Loved the flow of this piece. If only we would slow down before God makes us slow down. I am all for simplifying life! Good entry!
karen McLamb
08/11/05
Praise GOD! you slow down for the peace.
This is very,very good!
Beth Muehlhausen
08/13/05
Seems to take a crisis to believe God's wisdom - we need a "sabbath rest". Loved the repetition that effectively drew me into the rush!
Shari Armstrong 
08/13/05
Very good contrast between what we do and what we should do -well done!