The Official Writing Challenge
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Thank you for this great testimony! Yes, doesn't it make a difference when you discover your destiny is eternally safe in the hands of the One who made you? (From your opening paragraph, I wonder if you haven't got a bit of the preacher in you!)
God bless you as you yield your pen to Him!
06/07/06
While this is interesting reading, I would rearrange the first paragraph a bit. Bring your narrator into the story sooner. If your first sentence sounds like an impersonal "sermon," I'm afraid folks will skip past and miss reading this. And that would be their loss!

I like how you contrasted your narrator's lack of purpose with the recruiter, who had purpose, and the husband-to-be. You know how to write a good story---God bless your talent!