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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Help (02/20/06)

TITLE: Trapped From Within
By Donnie Vaughan
02/20/06


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Trapped From Within

He wakes again with the pain and sickness as though the
World has fallen upon his head. There has to be a way for
Him to regain his life and to be happy once more.
Ever since the drugs took over he has had nothing but heartache,
And the struggles he has endured have been so bad that he has
Considered taking his own life to get rid the pain.
Many of his friends have gone on to there final resting place and
He is not sure how much more he can stand before itís his turn to go.

He knows that his body can not withstand many more attacks as he
Has had to deal with and he wants it to end with out any pain but he
Understands that to get off of the drugs, he will have to go through a
Lot more agony and he is not so sure if his will power is strong enough.

Another day and he searches his soul for any strength only to find sorrow
And disappointment, so many times he has wanted to kick the habit and return to a better life, but without help from friends and neighbors that care he will not make it.
As he weakens, His heart is filled with sadness that he could not have found this peace he has now sooner, but god has away to bring joy where pain and sorrow once were.

As the doctor tells the family to let him rest for awhile they hear his soft voice and see the tears as he passes into a world that only peace and joy abound, heís not hurting now his mother says, and I know he will be alright.


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therese B03/01/06
This is a fine attempt to deal with a difficult subject. Is it personal?
Jan Ackerson 03/02/06
This almost reads more like prose than poetry, have you considered putting in in paragraph form? Very heartbreaking and poignant, some excellent word choices.
Debbie Sickler03/02/06
I agree with Jan. This does read more like a story rather than a poem. If you wrote it out in paragraphs, you could expand it and tell us more of his story. You mention towards the end that he has found peace. How did he come to God? How did he start the drug habbit in the first place? Give us some more info and this would be a very interesting story. Great start here. :)
Jessica Schmit03/03/06
So sad! The pain that you wrote about was very clear.