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This is a great story of hard times and what fighting and faith can do for such a situation.

Double check your punctuation, the commas should go inside the quotes. The only thing I wished you had added was the prayer to invite Jesus into his heart. It's a simple thing, but some readers may have never done that and showing the prayer would help them learn to talk to Jesus.

You did a nice job of staying on topic. The ending was a tad predictable because of your title. However your message is so clear. Having Jesus in our lives doesn't mean our problems will disappear, it just means we can count on God to give us the strength we need.
05/12/12
Loved it. Beautiful job of showing what is important in life. And, how Jesus will help us all in everything we do.

Well written, and very powerful in meaning.

Thank you.

God Bless,

Camille~
05/17/12
This is a wonderful story to read and (with a little variation!) is the story of many, praise God. You told it in a lovely style that was both heartwarming and encouraging. Thankyou