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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Astonishment (02/02/12)
i'm amazed at the burning desire of the Awesome Lover
i respond with all my being to his glorious wooing
stunned by the pardon for my heinous crimes
the murder of his Dear One by my recklessness
speechless to see a spike-impaled Jesus dying
dying and dying just for me
for my sins that caused his death

i'm astounded that the Seeker sought a Godless soul
a wanderer aimlessly seeking naught of worth
overwhelmed by the lover of my soul
all heaven knew of that embrace
an unexpected touching of the Savior and the leper
a miraculous turning of filth to clean
cleaner and cleaner by his blood

i'm overwhelmed by the safety of his forgiveness
still prone to hear the Siren's call
incredibly - he saved me from becoming a shipwrecked soul
a scheming Satan sets his snares - to catch this culprit unawares
splendidly – the Rescuer averts his catch to set me free
snatched from his net – the fowler failed and lost his prey

i'm astonished at his trust of the flawed clay of humanity
a vessel - of truth - not fit to be used in this highest work
extraordinarily – declared to be polished and clean for the Master's table
pouring out the sustaining Water of Life to languishing souls
serving on cleaner platters the Bread of Life to seekers of spiritual sustenance
staggeringly – he transforms these rotten goods to feed the poor
his robe - the final covering for our table fare
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Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 
02/09/12
beautiful and right on topic. There is nothing more astonishing than the love Jesus has for me.
Hiram Claudio
02/10/12
You paint very moving images that remind us of the true reason for our faith ... His OH so great love! Nicely done.
C D Swanson 
02/11/12
Beautiful and staggering. Loved it. God Bless~
Allison Egley 
02/12/12
Oh, I like this a lot!

This isn't exactly "red ink," just a suggestion... pink in perhaps? ;) Anyway, I loved how you had the repeated words in the first two stanzas ("dying and dying" then "cleaner and cleaner") and I kept expecting that in the last two stanzas as well.

Great job with this one.
Rhonda Ritenour
02/14/12
A very unique, engaging and thought-provoking entry. I think what I like most is that it's the type of writing that you need to read a couple times in order to grasp the deeper meanings behind some of the statements/phrases. Good job!
Helen Carr
02/14/12
Beautiful use of words and descriptions. My only "red ink" which others may disagree with, is possibly use a little more punctuation? I got the impression that you purposely avoided commas and the like, but it may have helped the sentences flow a little better. But, like I said, that may just be me! A lovely entry, well done.
Danielle King 
02/14/12
Lovely and engaging poem with powerful images.
Lillian Rhoades 
02/14/12
I love the symbolism and the metaphors you use in this piece ("all heaven knew of that embrace"), and more.

You paint the perfect picture of redemption, purpose for redemption, and the continued work of grace in the believer's life; and do so with style.

Nicely done!
Karlene Jacobsen 
02/15/12
Beautiful. You have captured the amazement I feel every time I stop to consider all He is and has done.
Lisa Fowler
02/16/12
Excellent word painting. Enjoyable read. Thank you for sharing.
Linda Goergen
02/16/12
Excellent poem...it is truly an astonishment, the depth of Jesus’ love for us. Beautifully written reminder that He gives what none of us deserve. Well done.
C D Swanson 
02/16/12
Congratulations! God Bless~
Leola Ogle
02/17/12
Congrats Colin! Superb job!