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By Sharon Westwood
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…three weeks later……
It didn’t seem like three weeks passed since he was off tending to Millie’s illness and well… he didn’t like to think the word,... funeral. He clicked on his computer and wondered how he would begin to put his life together. His morning coffee tastes bland as he decides to open Millie’s Blog. Millie was always into writing and had started the blog on a whim. Several years ago Eddie saw her jotting in her frayed journal. As Millie shared her writings he told her how he thought she should share herself with others. Millie had always been shy and fanfare wasn’t her style. Somehow she was able to write in a blog, feeling no one really knew where the words came from. As Eddie read her last entry his eyes welled with tears…. Today, I look out through the raindrops scattered on the windowpane. The world looks content, even through the tears. Life smiles on the other side.
Eddie’s lips gently tip to a grateful smile. For Millie, he knew this was true.
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You might want to break some of the paragraphs into smaller ones. Especially in a short story the lack of white space can overwhelm the reader.
Make sure you stay consistent with the tense. You started out in the past then slipped to present then back again.
I liked the ending. I thought he was going to start writing her blog so she would live on through it. It really tugged at my heart. Grief is such a hard subject to deal with.
Very creative and you showed us the story instead of telling. Great job.
Lovely ending. God Bless.
She sounded like a lovely woman, who was positive and filled with God's love and peace. Powerful ending, a perfect line to end this heart tugging entry.
Loved it...God bless you~
Well done!