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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Year(s) (01/20/11)

TITLE: Pain Has an Element of Blank
By Ambrose W
01/26/11


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Maybe Iím just a product of my wasted, detached generation, but I just donít think a guy should get too invested in a girl heís only been seeing for two months.†

Cause you gotta figure, after two months, youíre not even at the point where you see each other every single day.† You still have to call and see if you wanna make plans together on Saturday nights, cause itís not implied yet.† Youíre still convincing all your buddies that youíre not gonna stop hanging out with them on account of this new chick in your life.

So, assuming you met this girl in your English class, thereís two days a week for sure that youíre seeing her.† Then of course, you have to skip a class here or there to show her that youíve got better things to do than show up just to see what sweater sheís wearing that dayÖwhich, of course, you donít, but you gotta be strong.†

Add to that a couple coffee dates, a few dinners out, a tailgating party with her friends, itís safe to say that youíve only seen this girl 20 times in the span of two months.

So after these 20 sightings, I think itís ridiculous that a guy Ė no matter how cute this girl is Ė should think that anybodyís ready to buckle down and get serious.

Itís not that thereís anything wrong with her.† Itís not that you wouldnít wanna get serious eventually.† Sheís great.† You ask her for her English notes because theyíre actually really good, and you like the way her handwriting looks.† Itís not that bubble letter crap that girls train themselves to use in 7th grade.† Hers is natural and kinda like cursive and printing rolled into one.

In fact, the thing you like the most about her, is that she made you like Emily Dickinson.† Because now that you think about it, that chick was pretty deep too.

But still, even though sheís beautiful, and youíre excited to be with her, and smell her when she hugs you, itís too soon to believe that she really likes you as much as sheís letting on.
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I mean, youíre the sort of guy that is basically good at most things.† You can change the oil in your car, you can get a decent grade in a class you donít care about, and you can cook a spaghetti dinner.

But youíre not amazing at much.† And itís way too soon to tell her that.†

You thought you were amazing, when you were like 10.† Thought you were gonna be the President, or swim the English Channel, or at least be really awesome at video games.

Your father would catch you playing air guitar, fantasizing about being David Lee Roth.† He would loosen his necktie and run his fingers through his comb-over.

ďI swear, son.† Would it kill you to give your old man some hope every now and then?Ē

And later when you wanted to play basketball so bad, but the coach wouldnít let you off the bench because your lay-ups sucked.

Then later still in high school when the girl you were dating laughed when you said you really hoped to get voted Most Likely to Succeed.

The fact is that those people saying you werenít great; they were probably right.

But you canít tell this girl that now, because when you tell a girl youíre insecure, thatís an immediate deal-breaker. Girls donít want to constantly coddle you, or roll their eyes and say things like: ďBaby, I love you, when will you believe that?Ē

Oh they say they want sensitive, but they donít really mean it.† Maybe girls want the occasional poem, or some John Cusack in ĎHigh Fidelityí type of neurotic-yet-adorable OCD tendencies. But they donít want dudes with blubbering Daddy-issues.† They want mysterious warriors, who ride motorcycles and play by their own rules. Everybody knows that.

But truth be told, when it comes right down to it, you're just tired of getting the wind knocked outta you every time you try to stand up to go someplace new.† Itís like you've been running on fumes your whole life.† And you feel too guilty to drag anybody down with you.

But she doesnít know that yet.

And after two months of dating - no matter how perfect she is - itís impossible to tell her that just cause youíre only 23, it doesnít mean the years canít wear on a guy.


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Beth LaBuff 01/27/11
You have so many classic lines like, "Your father...would loosen his necktie and run his fingers through his comb-over." Your entry has a lot of depth and fantastic internal dialogue, Ö this is wonderfully creative for the topic!
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 01/29/11
Loved it! Loved it! Level it! His dialog was dead on and you have a great sense of humor!
diana kay01/31/11
great writing. title was a bit enigmatic but i loved the first person voice that you told this in.
Beth LaBuff 02/03/11
hey! super congrats on your highly commended yellow bar! You are on a roll! :)