The Official Writing Challenge
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This was such a touching story! And I was convinced the author was real until I read the disclaimer, so great job making your character come to life. What a sweet story.
If it had not been for the disclaimer at the end I would have thought the MC was real. Beautifully written and very touching. Good job and God bless.
06/07/10
You've written a wonderful story to honor the military and their families. Great job.
06/08/10
Stories like this really tug at the heart.

It seems to me that this is more about a writer than an editor--and watch your use of apostrophes (not needed in one's). The disclaimer wasn't necessary, and left me with a bit of a thud.

The MC's little medal from his daughter was so sweet--what a wonderful little detail.
I thought this a true story, when I began reading it. It seemed so real all the details, especially the young daughter's letter and the Hero Ribbon. Thank you for a story that honors our Veterans and Active Military Service Personnel. Keep Writing.